1. Name_Kristiena Shafer and Tegan Crist ___ Date_16 April 2012_____ Period__3rd__
Shaping Sheet
Introduction
Fact Statement: Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder, known as PTSD is a growing issue in the United
States in soldiers and veterans returning from war. Unfortunately most people are not fully aware
of this issue and the organizations that help, the treatments they use and what communities can
do to help out.
Claim Statement: We chose to focus on this particular issue because of the books we have been
reading and the discussions we have been having in our Tenth grade World Literature class. The
books we read included: All Quiet on the Western Front by Erich Maria Remarque, Code Talker
by Joseph Bruchac and Ghosts of War by Ryan Smithson. Our discussions included information
on issues about war that came from our individual books. The issue that really stuck out and
interested us was about PTSD, the effects it has on veterans, and how veterans can receive help
from this mental illness.
Thesis Sentence: It is very important to understand the severity of this issue because without
knowing about the organizations that help these veterans, the specific treatments these
organizations use and what we can do as a community to help; we are letting our countries
veterans down.
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Topic Sentence 1: What are some of the larger organizations that help veterans that suffer from
PTSD and their families that also feel the effects from PTSD?
Concrete Detail 1: The Veterans Association known as the VA helps veterans that suffer from
PTSD and the veterans’ families. They help these veterans and their families to fulfill President
Lincoln's promise, which was: “To care for him who shall have borne the battle and for his
widow, and his orphan” and they do this by serving and honoring the men and women who are
America’s veterans.
Commentary 1: While on a military mission, Teresa was badly injured by a roadside
bomb and because of this traumatic event, she developed PTSD. Teresa is now doing better
thanks to the treatment from the Veterans Association. Although her problems have not
completely diminished, she now has a great support team to help her. Without the diagnosis of
PTSD and the treatment for it by the VA, Teresa could have ended up in bad condition or even

2. dead if she had committed suicide like many other veterans do that suffer from PTSD and are not
properly treated.
Commentary 2: In addition to the effects PTSD has on the veterans, PTSD also affects
the veteran’s family. The VA offers different treatment options for affected families. Treatment
can include individual treatment for the veteran, as symptom improvement for the person
suffering would also benefit the family. Family therapy is also offered to teach family members
how to help and how to get their own needs met.
Concrete Detail 2: The Wounded Warrior Project is an organization aimed at helping veterans
reintegrate into society as well as bring in the community to help raise awareness of
injured(mentally or physically) service members.
Commentary 1: This organization has four different programs that they use to help with
veterans which include mind, body, economic empowerment, and engagement. The Mind
program in particular aims to help combat stress brought about due to battlefield
experiences.
Commentary 2: Nancy is a veteran that lost her eye in the war and because of it went into
isolation. Her counselor talked her into going to a Wounded Warrior Project meeting. "I
have to say it saved my life. It really did. Instead of being what I thought was a
disappointment to my family, I ended up being their inspiration," says Nancy. She now
works with this project to continue giving inspiration to veterans.
Concrete Detail 3: The American Legion is a large organization which provides vast support to
all areas of veteran’s services.
Commentary 1: The American Legion provides current information and resources to all
veterans. In the case of PTSD, the organization has a health center dedicated to assisting
PTSD victims. It also aids in enrollment in VA (Veteran Affairs) services.
Commentary 2: Veteran’s Affairs has dedicated 206 Health Centers to PTSD and other
trauma-related illnesses nationwide.
Wrap Up Sentence: These larger organizations and many more are the things that keep veterans
with PTSD going.

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Topic Sentence 2: What are some of the less known about or smaller organizations that help
veterans that suffer from PTSD and their families that also suffer from the effects of PTSD?
Concrete Detail 1: Veterans for America (VFA), is uniting a new generation of veterans with
those from past wars to address the causes, conduct, and consequences of war. VFA focuses
specifically on the invisible wounds of war that include psychological traumas and traumatic
brain injuries.
Commentary 1: The VFA is different because at its core, it is the voice of troops. From
testimonials, the VFA is able to identify trends in service-connected injuries. These trends allow
the VFA to identify patterns in causes, symptoms, and treatments of post-combat needs.
Commentary 2: Veterans for America’s (VFA) Wounded Warrior Outreach Program is
concerned with the staggeringly high levels of mental health problems and neurological
injuries experienced by today’s troops, and the lack of resources and rehabilitative
programs available for our wounded. We are also especially troubled with the
deployment policies that have been used since 9/11. Too many members of our military
have been repeatedly exposed to high-intensity combat with insufficient time at home
between deployments. These policies have had a profoundly devastating effect on the
mental-health of our troops and their families.
Concrete Detail 2: Iraq and Afghanistan Veterans of America (IAVA) is a 21st century veterans’
organization dedicated to standing with the 2.4 million veterans of Iraq and Afghanistan from the
day they return home through the rest of their lives. Their mission is to improve the lives of Iraq
and Afghanistan veterans and their families.
Commentary 1: Rey Leal is a veteran that is a member of IAVA and he says that the
IAVA commercial he saw on TV, changed his life. He would rather sit and stare at the
TV screen until the sun came up than close his eyes and relive everything. This
organization made him feel not alone and gave him a sense of belonging.
Commentary 2: Sherman Watson a Marine veteran suffered from a Traumatic brain
injury as well as the invisible wounds of war that many other veterans face. Through the
IAVA program, Sherman has participated in events across the country and has shared his
story with millions from California to Capitol Hill. These are the things that have kept
him going and able to face his problems.
Concrete Detail 1: The Veterans Crisis Line connects Veterans in crisis and their families and
friends with qualified, caring Department of Veterans Affairs responders through a confidential
toll-free hotline, online chat, or text.
Commentary 1: Family members and loved ones are often the first to realize a Veteran
may need help. Responders at the Veterans Crisis Line are specially trained to help

4. Veterans’ families and friends through any crisis. They will work with families to make
sure their loved one gets connected to care.
Commentary 2: The Veterans Crisis Line is staffed by caring, qualified VA responders—
many who are Veterans themselves. They understand what Veterans have been through
and the challenges Veterans of all ages and service eras face.
Wrap Up Sentence: These less known about organizations also are a big help to veterans that
suffer from PTSD.
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Topic Sentence 3: What are some of the things veterans can see or become involved with that
will help veterans that suffer from PTSD and their families that also suffer from the effects of
PTSD?
Concrete Detail 1: Being part of a spiritual group of people helps veterans that suffer from PTSD
grow spiritually and in other ways.
Commentary 1: A spiritual group may be part of a church, synagogue, mosque, or temple.
Other spiritual groups include a 12-Step group or a group that meets on a regular basis for
prayer, talking about scriptures, or meditation. Some even see their spiritual community
as a group of like-minded people who are working for a larger cause.
Commentary 2: A spiritual community helps veterans recover from PTSD by giving them
social support, rituals and ceremonies to look forward to, a place to volunteer and people
to share thoughts and feelings with.
Concrete Detail 2: The HEARTS museum is a museum for veterans to honor, remember,
educate, inspire, heal and serve veterans and the public.
Commentary 1: The museum provides a place that Veterans can congregate and discuss
their experiences, and in the process, heal. It also permits them to talk about their
experiences with Museum Visitors.
Commentary 2: This museum has an inside and an outside exhibit. Inside there is a
timeline of wars, an army section, a navy section, a marines section, an air force section,
a coastguard section, a women section, a medics section, a prisoner of war and missing in
action section, a chapel, a home front section and a library.
Concrete Detail 3: Veteran Memorials are a place to honor the veterans that died serving their
country and for others to come and visit.
Commentary 1: The Vietnam Veterans Memorial Wall is dedicated to honoring those
who died in the Vietnam War. Since 1996 it has evolved into something more. It is now

5. also a place of healing for those affected by one of the most divisive wars in our nation's
history.
Commentary 2: With the addition of six names added in 2010 the total of names on the
wall is now 58,272. Approximately 1200 of these are listed as missing (MIA's, POW's,
and others).
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Wrap Up Sentence: These are just some of the things that veterans can see or be a part of that
help them recover from PTSD.
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Topic Sentence 4: What are some of the physical treatments that are available to veterans that
suffer from PTSD?
Concrete Detail 1: Rock climbing is a type of physical treatment to help disabled veterans chase
their dreams.
Commentary 1: One rock climbing clinic for disabled veterans is called “Miracles on a
Mountainside” and one veteran says he accomplished something he did not think was
possible, to be able to smile again.
Commentary 2: Another veteran found himself spiraling into substance abuse and with
this rock climbing experience, he is about to reach one year of sobriety.
Concrete Detail 2: Yoga is another physical treatment that helps veterans that suffer from PTSD
recover.
Commentary 1: Hugo Patrocinio was wounded by a suicide bomber, but he eventually
recovered from the physical wounds. The psychological wounds all but went away, so he
eventually turned to yoga after learning about it in group therapy. He reports that
somehow yoga worked for him. Practicing yoga helps him cope and now he is not afraid
to go to sleep.
Commentary 2: This particular program of yoga is designed to help veterans that suffer
from PTSD and it provides them with body relaxation and breathing exercises which are
tools for managing with the emotions, memories and cognitive thoughts that come with
war.
Concrete Detail 3: Running marathons is a potential physical treatment for PTSD and some
veterans are using this treatment to help with PTSD symptoms.
Commentary 1: Simon Buckden is a veteran that runs marathons to raise awareness of
PTSD.

6. Commentary 2: Running marathons give veterans something to do, to get out of isolation
and to see themselves improve at something.
Wrap Up Sentence: Physical activities keep the mind alert and for veterans that suffer from
PTSD, it is a therapy.
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Topic Sentence 5: What kinds of animals can be used for PTSD treatment?
Concrete Detail 1: Horse therapy known as hippo-therapy is a type of therapy that is being used
to help treat veterans that suffer from PTSD.
Commentary 1: Aaron Heliker went through six tours of duty in Iraq and he was left with
a traumatic brain injury, third-degree burns and nerve damage in his leg. He also
developed PTSD and decided he would end his life in one week. Then he started the
hippo-therapy and canceled his plans to die and went from taking 42 pills a day to only
four.
Commentary 2: Working with horses requires the veteran to learn to trust and to stay
calm. After learning to do this with the horse, the veteran can then be in control with they
have PTSD symptoms.
Concrete Detail 2: Dogs and wolfs are being used to help veterans that suffer from PTSD.
Commentary 1: David Sharpe developed PTSD from war and when he returned home, he
was always looking for a fight and he would find himself beating on the walls. After he
adopted a dog from the local animal shelter, he learned to deal with his problems and the
dog would wake him from nightmares.
Commentary 2: Through a program called “Warriors and Wolves,” the task of taming the
wolf-dogs has been given to three U.S. military veterans who say they can relate to the stress of
trying to transition to a normal life. McDonald says he’s learned from the animals and knew if he
could help them, he could help himself. “I made a wonderful change,” he said.
Concrete Detail 3: Other animals such as cats, birds and even dolphins are used to help veterans
that suffer from PTSD.
Commentary 1: Pets reduce stress, reduce anxiety, lower blood pressure, boost the
immune system, and promote exercise. They are now known to help PTSD patients to reduce
their symptoms.
Commentary 2: For the PTSD patient, pets are the ever-affectionate friend determined to
give and receive comfort and attention.
Wrap Up Sentence: Animals are a great way to calm the mind and forget about PTSD symptoms.

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Topic Sentence 6: What are some of the mental therapy options available for veterans that suffer
from PTSD?
Concrete Detail 1: Group therapy is a widely used method for veterans that suffer from PTSD.
Commentary 1: Expressing your emotions to others helps release inner tension, which is
why group therapy aids many PTSD afflicted veterans. Being able to tell others how you feel and
understanding that you aren’t alone really helps the struggle.
Commentary 2: Studies suggest that group therapy helps reduce symptoms of PTSD.
Concrete Detail 2: Individual counseling is another option for veterans seeking treatment for
their PTSD symptoms.
Commentary 1: It is sometimes uncommon for veterans to feel comfortable about talking
in groups about their PTSD symptoms and problems, so individual counseling can create a more
comfortable environment to speak.
Commentary 2: Explaining your problems to another individual can help you understand
your problems a little further in depth, which can bring forth a decrease in symptoms.
Concrete Detail 3: Medication that is medically prescribed or self prescribed is used to treat
veterans’ symptoms of PTSD.
Commentary 1: Studies show that a number of medications are helpful in minimizing the
three symptom clusters of PTSD. Most of the time, medications do not entirely eliminate
symptoms but provide a symptom reduction and are best used in conjunction with an ongoing
program of trauma specific psychotherapy.
Commentary 2: Some that suffer from PTSD self-medicate pain with heroin, prescription
drugs, and alcohol.
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Wrap Up Sentence: Mental therapy is another way to help the veterans with PTSD.
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Topic Sentence: What can we as a community do to raise awareness of PTSD and its effects on
veterans?
Concrete Detail 1: Websites are one way for a large majority of people to access information
people add about PTSD.

8. Commentary 1: One example is the website for the National Institute of Mental Health.
Commentary 2: Their website contains information on the illness itself as well as coping
techniques and other information.
Concrete Detail 2: Veterans that visit schools and tell about their experiences help teach children
and young adults about PTSD.
Commentary 1: Westly Perkins goes around in his free time speaking to students and
other people about PTSD and how it affects the families of the soldier and the soldier
himself/herself.
Commentary 2: Perkins also wrote a poem about his experience with PTSD that is very
insightful to the feelings he was feeling during his fight with PTSD.
Concrete Detail 3: Fundraisers are beneficial to raise money for PTSD.
Commentary 1: An organization called Allvets.org makes Para-cord bracelets to sell on
their website to benefit PTSD. The money funds PTSD project and PTSD Survivors of America.
Commentary 2: An annual fundraiser occurs on Remembrance Day on November 11th.
11/11 PTSD and Trauma Day is a global event founded by Eric Huurre. It plays special tribute to
those affected by PTSD.
Wrap Up Sentence: Raising awareness is very important for the community to do for the
veterans that suffer from PTSD.
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Topic Sentence: What can we as a community do to help the veterans that suffer from PTSD?
Concrete Detail 1: A large amount of PTSD treatment centers and programs are funded primarily
by donations.
Commentary 1: An organization called PTSD Foundation of America pledges to “Heal
the unseen wounds of war” by accepting donations at locations throughout the nation. They also
provide education about PTSD through statistics.

9. Commentary 2: Other organizations collect donations to fund special programs and
housing for PTSD victims in their time of need. These organizations are 100% funded by
individuals.
Concrete Detail 2: Volunteering at local PTSD organizations or with other veteran associations
can make a big difference in the veterans that are suffering from PTSD.
Commentary 1: Two seniors in Oregon did a project on helping veterans. They began a
newsletter that gave information about PTSD and how families can cope.
Commentary 2: By volunteering time to the veterans or the organization for veterans, it
makes a difference that money just cannot compete with.
Concrete Detail 3: Moral support is something that you can give no matter who you are. This
small thing helps veterans by giving them the feeling of welcome.
Commentary 1: Bonnie Norwood and friends went to Washington to show moral support
to the veterans.
Commentary 2: Moral support is something that is easy to show. Just by a simple smile to
a veteran passing by, the veteran feels the moral support.
Wrap Up Sentence: Helping veterans that suffer from PTSD is very important and anyone can
help.
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Topic Sentence 9: What are some things that veterans and their families can do to speak out?
Concrete Detail 1: Unfortunately many PTSD victims cannot overcome their symptoms which
results in suicide.
This leaves families of the veteran in great need of support.
Commentary 1: Support groups for suicide survivors are a very delicate matter. Many
families have a difficult time hearing stories of other survivors. It is important to consider group
size and parallel life experiences when choosing a group.
Commentary 2: Helping these troubled families has become a goal for many
organizations. Resources

10. Include the Center for Suicide Prevention Survival Council as well as many other agencies
funded by Veterans Affairs.
Concrete Detail 2: Television is a way to spread information and ideas about veterans and PTSD
to a lot of people in a short amount of time.
Commentary 1: Commercials about PTSD and veterans are on the television now and
they are helping veterans find themselves again.
Commentary 2: Television is also a way for families of veterans to speak about
something such as the loss of a veteran or the injuries of one.
Concrete Detail 3: Public speaking about PTSD helps veterans find new treatment options to
cope with their symptoms.
Commentary 1: D.C. Faber, a retired Afghanistan veteran, has spoken publicly about his
experiences with PTSD and how he has overcome his symptoms. Using data and experiences of
other PTSD victims,
Faber has designed a new model of post-trauma.
Commentary 2: Speaking publicly about this disease can help to decrease the suicide rate
among PSTD
diagnosed veterans. In this manner, ideas can be spread quickly thus reaching more victims.
These lectures can also allow attendees, both victims and families, to research alternative
methods to coping with post-trauma.
Wrap Up Sentence: Speaking about tragic things helps the mind to release some of the built up
tension. These are only some of the ways to do this.
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Conclusion

11. By being aware of the organizations that help veterans that suffer from PTSD, there is a
knowledge gained of where to direct someone you come in contact with that has PTSD or where
to go to learn more about PTSD. The different types of therapy used by these programs are
important because each has different outcomes and different ones will work better depending on
the veteran. Being an aware community that helps with donations, time or just moral support
helps these veterans and changes their future.