1. Revising From Wide Shot
to Close Up
Part 2: Medium Shots

2. Wide Shot to Close Up review
Wide shot = big picture
Medium shot = paragraphs
Close shot = sentences

3. We’ve already practiced revising from the wide
shot
Here’s a quick review:

4. For wide shot (big picture) revising,
consider:
Did you answer the essay prompt question(s)
correctly and thoroughly?
Did you remain focused on answering the
prompt question(s) throughout your entire
essay?

5. Let’s quickly review how directors use wide,
medium and close shots to tell a story

6. Here’s short clip of the opening scene from Ray
(2004) directed by Taylor Hackford

8. Here’s short clip of the opening scene from The
Good, the Bad, and the Ugly (1967) directed by
Sergio Leone

10. Now let’s transition to medium shots and learn
about how you can use them to “direct” your
writing

11. Medium Shot (Paragraphs)
Does each paragraph remain focused on one
topic?
Because this is a research essay, the topic is
usually a single source.

12. Example:
In your evaluation essay, does each paragraph
focus on how well a single source answered
your question and/or the strengths and
weaknesses of a single source?
Only the transition/intro paragraph should
deviate from this focus.

13. Let’s take a look at an example paragraph and
see if we can revise to make it a strong medium
shot in the student’s “movie”

14. Two quick reminders:
1 - We know the student’s research question is
"What are the effects of teen suicide and how
can it be prevented?"
2 - We’ve read the abstract of the source the
author evaluates in the example paragraph

18. Let’s break this paragraph down line by line,
then we’ll decide how to revise

27. So let’s think about the big patterns we noticed

28. Patterns:
Plenty of information about the source’s content
Some digressions into personal opinion
Good evaluation, but not always 100% clear

29. Before you revise in groups, think about the
essay prompt

30. Prompt (excerpt):
The main purpose of this Essay is to evaluate
the arguments made in your sources. By
“evaluate,” I mean that you should offer a
critical opinion on them (evaluate their
strengths and weaknesses).
see: http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html

31. The two big tasks for this essay
were:
Which sources offer the best answers to your
research question? Why? How?
Point out strengths and weaknesses in your
sources.
see: http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html

32. Now that we’ve broken down the essay, get
into your learning groups and try to revise the
paragraph so it stays on topic and fulfills the
essay prompt

33. When you’re done revising, we’ll look at each
group’s work
We’ll choose two and put them in the
slideshow, which I’ll re-post on the blog and
Canvas (I’ll tweet a link as well)

34. View this slideshow on the blog (using the
slideshare viewer) at the blog here:
http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
note to self: have actual link above when it’s finished
You can also download it from the blog or
Canvas and find a link on the class twitter feed