3. Feedback 1
What do you like about the design?
I particularly like the crown logo in the middle above the font as it works well because
it is the same colour as the font. I also like the banner of advertisements across the
top width of the page as it helps break up the page and adds colour as well as drawing
more attention to the publication. I like the overall look of the page as it looks clean
and is well presented. I think the 3 columns work well as it makes it easy to read and
understand as well as looking modern.
What areas of the idea could be developed?
I think the font could be developed slightly more to make the headlines more eye
catching and give the newspapers name more of a signature look. The ‘gang wars
spurs gun violence debate’ headline font could be changed slightly as it looks a bit
spread out between each letter making It harder to read a bolder font could also be
used. I also think that the photograph of Barack Obama could be made smaller to
allow for more text and it not to fill up the whole column.
5. Feedback 2
What do you like about the design?
One thing which I like about this design is the article headline. It is catchy and fun, keeping
the reader engaged and making it less serious. This is good for a broadsheet because they
have a simpler and younger reading audience which means it does not need to be of a high
intelligence. The red banner with the newspaper name works well because the red helps it
to stand out and grabs the readers eye, it also separates it from the rest of the paper and
ensures it doesn’t blend in and look like part of the headline. I feel the image works well
along side the headline because it portrays nicely what the pun of the headline is and also
adds light hearted humour to the page.
What areas of the idea could be developed?
One thing I would change may be the advert at the top of the page. Although it works
nicely and is eye catching, I feel it would look more professional and better if when using
Photoshop you had zoomed in closer when cutting out certain aspects or even used a small
feather on your cut to make the edging smoother and less choppy. I would also consider
using a slightly larger picture or less copy on the front of the paper for your article as they
are not usually holding a lot of the story, cutting this down would make it more realistic and
would also leave more room to experiment and play with different images, fonts and sizes
to make it look more ‘fun’ and something pleasing to the eye.
7. Feedback 3
What do you like about the design?
I really like the font used on this fanzine I think that it is very suitable. Straight away I can tell
what type of sub culture the fanzine is made for. The images used on the fanzine page are clear
and I like how there isn’t too much text it is balanced out with the right amount of images. I also
really like the fanzine name as it is catchy and appropriate for the sub culture of hip-hop. I think
the collage of images on the inside page is really creative and interesting to look at. I also like the
bold border which is around the image I think this gives it a organized look. The language of the
copy is suitable for the audience as it is informative but it is written in a informal way.
What areas of the idea could be developed?
The only thing which I think could be improved on the fanzine is adding more colour, the fanzine
looks quite dull and I think adding colours that are suitable for the sub culture would give the
fanzine a stronger look.
8. Summary of Feedback
What do you agree with from your feedback?
• “Straight away I can tell what type of sub culture the fanzine is made for.” this shows that research
has helped the audience to know what fanzine it is which is important straight away.
•“I would change the advert at the top of the page. I feel it would look more professional and better
if when using Photoshop you had zoomed in closer when cutting out certain aspects or even used a
small feather on your cut to make the edging smoother and less choppy.” I agree with this because I’m
not very good at detailing around each character so it’s helped that they have noticed that so that I can
improve it further the next time. By making it look more professional and properly looking at it properly it
will help to make my tabloid much realistic.
•“The only thing which I think could be improved on the fanzine is adding more colour, the fanzine
looks quite dull and I think adding colours that are suitable for the sub culture would give the
fanzine a stronger look.” I completely agree with this because I went safe when doing my work black and
white but I also thought that black and white would be a good theme for Hip Hop as modern meets old
school. I tried adding colour to the front page but it wasn’t bright enough.
What do you disagree with from your feedback?
• “The „gang wars spurs gun violence debate‟ headline font could be changed slightly as it looks a bit
spread out between each letter” I disagree with this because you need to spread the letters out so that it
takes up a lot of the white space. To improve it I could add another little words just so it’s not to spaced
apart. (broadsheet)
• “I think that the photograph of Barack Obama could be made smaller to allow for more text and it
not to fill up the whole column.” I think that the image needed to be large so that it gave him a dictator
effect and to make him powerful, if he was smaller and surrounded by text then he would look a lot
weaker. (broadsheet)
