In the first draft, the lighting was poor due to incorrect camera settings, which was fixed in the second draft by changing to outdoor settings. Other improvements between drafts included removing a colon next to "Director" to seem less amateur, changing a computer scene zoom to a cut and close-up for a more documentary style, and adding establishing shots and changing shots for a beard application and dance scene to improve the storytelling. Additionally, drawings on paper were replaced with an iPad and friends were made to seem more understanding in a prom scene between drafts.

1. (Draft 1 – Draft 2)

2. In the first draft the lighting wasn’t great as it
appeared as blue, as we forgot to change the
camera settings to outdoor
In the second draft we remembered to
change the camera settings to outdoor, and
therefore the lighting is much better
Draft 1 Draft 2
Beside the word Director was a colon, which
appeared amateur
We removed the colon and changed
the font of the writing

3. Computer scene (flashback)
We used the camera to zoom into the
screen which made it seem documentary
like.
Instead we changed it to a cut and
then had a close-up of the words
Jodie was reading
Draft 1 Draft 2

4. Applying beard scene(flashback)
When Jodie is applying beard,
there is only one cut the whole
way through
Starts with Wide shot to establish
where exactly Jodie is
Then mid shot of Jodie trimming
beard
Close up of Jodie's beard
Draft 1
Draft 2

5. Jodie dance scene (flashback)
Whole dance scene was filmed using one
shot
Shot of Jodie dancing, and shot of mum walking
towards room
Mum talks to me and walks out of room Shot reverse shot of conversation
Jodie bangs on the door out of anger Jodie is more upset than frustrated and slides down door
Draft 1
Draft 2

6. Prom scene (flashback)
Jodie was drawing what to wear to
prom on a piece of paper
Jodie shows what she is wearing to
prom on an ipad
Jodie's friends aren't accepting
her and laugh
Jodie's friends are more
understanding of her
Draft 1 Draft 2