11. “Researchers have demonstrated that [we] make decisions in an
emotional manner and then justify them rationally”
– Renvoisé & Morin, Neuromarketing
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15. Old Brain New Brain
Emotional Rational
Automatic Reflective
Elephant Rider
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18. The Six ‘Old Brain’ Stimuli
1. Self-Centred 6. Emotions
2. Contrast 5. Visual Stimuli
3. Tangible Input 4. Beginning & End
21. Diagnose the Differentiate your Demonstrate the
PAIN CLAIM GAIN
What is the need? Why is your organisation How are you going to
Why is this a problem for your best placed to make things better?
supporter? address the need? And why does this matter
to your supporter?
Deliver to the
OLD BRAIN
35. “P.S. As a token of our
appreciation for your gift,
we will add your name to
our supporter dedication
wall which will be featured
on the real Rainbow
Warrior. Your name will
stand alongside others
from around the world who
are prepared to contribute
to a greener world.”
36.
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40.
41.
42. The Mother Teresa Principle
If I look at the mass, I will never act.
If I look at the one, I will.
53. ‣ Never use a metaphor, simile or other
figure of speech which you are used to
seeing in print.
‣ Never use a long word when a short one
will do.
‣ If it is possible to cut a word out, always
cut it out.
Geroge Orwell ‣ Never use the passive where you can use
the active.
Politics and the
English Language ‣ Never use a foreign phrase, a scientific
(1946) word or a jargon word if you can think of
an everyday English equivalent.
‣ Break any of these rules sooner than say
anything outright barbarous.
60. “With over 72,500 people in Scotland
needing the support and understanding
of a Dementia Nurse, and that figure
expected to double over the next 25 to
30 years, it’s essential that this appeal is
a success.”
More than 70,000 people in Scotland
need the the support and understanding
of a Dementia Nurse. That’s 70,000
mothers, fathers, wives or husbands.
Perhaps one of them is even someone
you know.
And the shocking news is that over the
next 25 years, the number of people
with dementia is set to double. That’s
going to put intense pressure on our
services. We need your support now so
that we can ensure every person with
dementia receives the care and support
they need.
74. Helpline Number
1800 341 900
Clear, tangible, early ask
in standfirst
Content warning
Starts telling the story…
(visual descriptions)
Emotion
Detail (credibility)
Letter mentions “you”,
“your” or “yourself ” 11
times on first page.
75. “you” / “your”
mentioned a further 8
times here
Need emphasised
Deadline to build
urgency
Specific ask linked to
benefits
Personal testimony to
build credibility
79. Data capture at top
Helpline Number
1800 341 900
Prominent reference to
€250 tax efficient giving
level
Repeat of call to action
from Margaret
80. The Results…
New donors recruited: 196 (30% ahead of target)
(36% more than 2009)
Average Gift: €141 (Increase of 67% on 2009)
Net cost per acquisition: €0 (down from €121 in 2009)
82. General Monthly Gifts Top Donors
2009
2010
General Cash +28%
Monthly Gifts +88%
Top Donors +227%
83. Not just tangible - restricted
Increased focus on top donor segments
Core service - familiar,
understandable topic
Emotional, donor-centred,
visual, great story
Clear need & achievable solution
84. “You” or “Your” is repeated
14 times on Page 1
(and donor’s name appears four times)
Visual stimulus
Articulation of need
Introduces story...
Thanks donor and
demonstrates impact
86. What you need to know
about direct response copy
‣ Long copy almost always beats short copy
‣ Use ‘I’ and ‘You’ but mostly ‘You’
‣ Use active rather than passive language
‣ Keep and language simple, the sentences
short
the
avoid jargon like the plague
87. What you need to know
about direct response copy
‣ Make it sounds like someone is taking
‣ Appeal on the basis of benefits, not needs
(or features)
‣ Tell(make a gift of €25; email your localthem to
do
people exactly what you want
TD)...
‣ ... And make it as easy as possible for them
to do it.
88. What you need to know
about direct response copy
‣ You can drive up response by using...
- urgency
- deadlines
- targets
89. What you need to know
about direct response copy
‣ Tell stories
‣ Use emotion
‣ Make it personal
‣ PS: Always include a PS - it’s usually read
first and most often
90. Make it easy to read
‣ Use a large font (12pt or larger) and a serif
typeface
‣ Indent paragraphs and vary their length
‣ Break up the text images, handwritten notes
underline, italics,
with sub-heads, bold,
91. Make it easy to respond
‣ Be clear what you’re looking for
‣ Large donation forms and plenty of room
to write
‣ Make forms easy to negotiate