The document provides feedback on a student's GCSE photography coursework tasks. For one task, the teacher praises the student's sense of discovery but notes they would have liked to see more close-up images. For another task, the teacher likes the mix of black and white and color photos and the framing, and finds the analysis of exhibitions to be excellent. Overall the work shows understanding, but gaps need to be filled in and ideas further developed. Further feedback addresses experimenting with melting plastic, suggested artists to research, reworking light painting and close-up photos, and moving landscape photos together.

1. GCSE
Fortismere Photography Department
GCSE Photography Assessment Sheet
STUDENT:
TEACHER(S):
TITLE:
Anete Foss
Mr Holden
Coursework tasks
Target grade
WAG
DATE:
UNIT:
06/01/14
Coursework tasks
A+
B+
Comments & Targets
An interesting choice of exhibition which you clearly have enjoyed, this is evident in the visual representations
that you have made. However your analysis is very limited and needs to be much more in-depth. It is key that
you demonstrate an written understanding of the work.
The pictures that you have taken in this task show a real sense of discovery. However I would have liked to of
seen a few more close up images demonstrating a willingness to develop and refine your ideas.
Some interesting work but you must work on your analysis and development of your ideas
Comments & Targets
The pictures that you have taken in this task show a real sense of discovery. I especially like the mix of black and white and
colour this is particularly effective. The way you are framing is excellent breaking rules and making interesting crops really
adds to your photography.
The exhibitions that you visited are interesting and the analysis that you have written is excellent. In particular the way you
have described the Milles Aldridge work is very effective. Your use of contextual language and the way you have broken up
the pictures meanings demostartes a very good understanding of the work.
Overall some very good work that shows visual and understanding of your own work and that of the photographers that you
have chosen to look at. Well done
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Forces
Strand 1 - Force of nature – (T-)
Interesting use of photoshop but you must make sure to annotate your own work fully explaining what it is you are setting out
to do and if you feel you have been successful. You have a lot of images that are difficult to reas as a whole I think your
work would benefit from contact sheets.
Strand 2 - Applied Force – (T)
Again some interesting images but I thin you would benefit from creating contact sheets and putting more annotation in to
your own work. Remember the examiner will not get the chance to speak to you so all work must be self-explanatory.
Strand 3 - Force of transformation – (T-)
You need to make sure that you add the work of Maurizio Anzeri Giovanni and show some detailed analysis of his work.
Also again there is not enough work. You need to clearly show that you have developed the ideas in full.
GENNERAL COMMENTS
Some interesting work but you must make sure to explain all your ideas in full. You should also have in-depth photography
studies to back up all of your work. You also need to add your moving image work based on fire. It is key that you now fill in
the gaps in your project and develop your ideas further.
Force continued
Continue experimenting with melting plastic
Melt candles
Create a piece of work looking at the idea of fusing different objects in a melted state a juxtaposition of objects to create a
new exciting outcome.
Artists to look at
Salvdorr dali
Ted Freeman

2. GCSE
Teppei Kaneuji
http://www.weirdomatic.com/melting.html
A detail from Melted Bottle, Nagasaki, 1961 (from series Nagasaki 11:02). Photographer: Shomei Tomatsu/Marta
Movement –
Move light painting section from landscape. Rework final light painting final poise it needs to be refined and maybe be closer
up so we can see more of what is going on. More Light Artists need to be added in to the work to increase the contextual
part of the project
Close up abstraction –
Revisit final piece the one you have chosen at the moment is more of an interim. I would like to see you print them big and
capture the sense of texture and relief.
Landscape –
Move all work onto one page rather than having it on different sections.
Start with your environments then move onto ideas of dereliction. The joiners and david Hockney can be a strand that you
don’t continue. For your derelict series visit the abandoned warehouse in Totteridge see Leah for location.