Loneliness Cannot Be Eluded

1. Loneliness cannot be eluded
SIXTH LECTURE
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2. o …better than what
your reader likes to
do best
o …save your life
o …exactly that what
you would write if
you knew you’d die
after writing its last
sentence
YOUR STORY HAS TO BE…
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3. o…turn the
reading into an
experience
o…write
passionately
o…write with full
concentration
SO YOU, THE WRITER, HAS TO…
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4. A child cries
A child cries
From fear of loneliness.
Go near it
And fill its sleep with stories
So that it will forget.
We have to learn to make friends with
Loneliness: it cannot be eluded
Through eating
Or sex
It is a shadow
Following us from morning onwards.
- Subagio Sastrowardoyo -
EXERCISE 1
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5. EXERCISE 1
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Write (a part of) a story that will help to elude loneliness.
Make this the best thing ever written – so that the reader will forget
everything else.
o Write passionately and create a reading experience
o Show don’t tell!
o Write with your body!
o Choose consciously:
• Storyteller
• Storytelling voice
• Focalisator(s)
• Place and time

6. EXERCISE 2
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What makes you furious?

7. EXERCISE 3
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What makes you sad?

8. PLACE AND MEANING
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What makes you happy?

9. 1. Desire
2. Ability
3. Action
4. Consequences
REMEMBERl THE FOUR STAGES OF THE
PLOT
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10. Six roles
 Main character
 A goal
 A reason
 Opponent(s)
 Helper(s)
 Someone who profits
Four stages
 Desire
 Ability
 Action
 Results
CHECKLIST FOR YOUR STORY
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11. EXERCISE 5
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Fill in the checklist for your story

12. o Be clear
o Give your plot a
logical structure
o Facts should be
correct (research!)
o Your story must have
a point
o Your hero must have
a goal
o 4 stages
DIRECT YOUR READER!
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13. o Writing is about passion,
not about rules
o Writing well is sticking your
middle finger up to the
world, so also to the rules
of writing
o Don’t believe everything I
tell you
BUT…
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