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1. My year review

2. Review of my writing When I came into year 7 my writing was missing good punctuation and paragraphs. I used less interesting vocabulary and boring words for speech like “he said” over and over again. In my work my sentences were less varied – mostly the same –all long complex sentences. My spelling was slightly patchy and I sometimes missed out smaller words like and , it and I which made my work jumpy.

3. Improvement I found out what the writing AFs were I got to know the AFs and looked at what Mr. Bousfield said when he marked my work I worked out which AFs I needed to work on I Used vocabulary like !,? and ; I used the 3 paragraph rule I have one connective in each paragraph I used a thesaurus to find vivid vocabulary

4. Result Now I have more connectives in my writing I always have 3 paragraphs I use semicolons I have vivid vocabulary I always use a new line for a new speaker “the next morning I looked out the window to see if there was a dead bat on the bonet;nothing,just my car sat in the drive, although there was a slight crack in the windscreen.”