1. Should use connective to indicate new point Should integrate point and evidence Starting with ‘this’ means no comma needed... Explanation is tied specifically to the purpose and audience

2. Ambitious topic sentence. Best to start with specifics? Clearly explores thematic idea while rooted in text. Clearly explores thematic idea while rooted in text.

3. Before stating consequences, should explore connotation of glove and hand clearly Contrasts previous idea with clear connective.