15. Let’s prepare to write an essay! Here’s the prompt. There are many good and bad things about being in the seventh grade. Explain what these things are. What kind of prompt do we have? Did you say expository? You’re right!
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17. Additionally One First Second Next Another- if Although Finally In conclusion Indeed Consequently Stars are key ideas or controlling statements. Explanations Examples, Evidence are listed below. Conclusion: Sum up what you’ve said. Refer back to your introduction.
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20. Sample Introduction Although I have taken many wonderful vacations, my trip with my two best friends to New York City is one I’ll always remember. This was a fantastic trip because of the sights we saw, the people we met, the plays we enjoyed, and the laughs we shared. What’s the plan? What’s the topic? Each part of the plan will be developed into paragraphs.
21. After you make your web or outline, start writing your introduction. Leave space at the top for two more lines. ( It won’t count against you.) You might come back later to insert a little background information in the introduction. Remember to grab interest and show the plan of your paper in the introduction.
22. Introduction Have you ever thought about what are the good and the bad things in seventh grade? There are good things like changing classes and more freedom. Some of the bad things are you have to stay in school longer, you have SAT tests, and tests get harder. Stay with me as I explain the good and bad things about being in the seventh grade. How does the writer grab your attention?
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24. First I will tell you about the good and fun things about being in the seventh grade.You get to change classes so if one teacher is like Mrs. Trunchbull in Matilda, you are only with her for part of the day. If your teacher is like Ms. Honey you will enjoy a fabulous time with her. Another thing I enjoy is more freedom. We don’t have to walk in straight lines as if we were soldiers marching off to war. Next, you can get your own food instead of having the lunch ladies get it for you. I like spending time with my friends so if there are not in one of my classes, I can see them at lunch. Transition words help! Does he explain, give examples, use metaphors?
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28. Finally my next category is going to be things that come good and bad. First field trips are extremely fun because you can talk and miss school. However it’s bad if you go somewhere boring or can’t sit with your friend. Everybody loves P.E. because we play real sports with competitiveness. But sadly when we’re leaving PE, my clothes get sweaty which doesn’t feel good. Everybody knows the pluses and minuses of Homework! We have so much homework it just takes the energy out of you, which is bad. What is good about it is that the more homework you have, the better chance you have to pull up your grade. Did you find the transitions? What are the key ideas? How does he explain his key ideas?
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30. In conclusion the seventh grade has good and bad things involved. Such as more freedom, and changing classes. Some other things are SAT test, going to school longer, and quizzes and tests. Homework, P.E., and field trips fall into both of those categories. What are your transitions? Does the writer sum up what he written? Does he refer back to the introduction. This paragraph was from an actual essay written by a student for the state writing assessment. His organization gave him a four.
31. Whoops! What did we forget? Did you think title ? You are right! How about – “The Good and Bad Things About Seventh Grade” Nah… Boring. Interesting titles have an action word. How about- “Good and Bad Things Happen in Seventh Grade” …better How about “Seventh Grade, Good or Bad- You Be the Judge”
32. Remember we said to leave a little space at the top. Let’s look at a classmate’s essay and see why … In the near future I would like to become a forensic scientist and help solve crimes. The steps I would have to take to achieve my goals are finishing school, practice the procedure of my major, and be successful in everything I do. What My Near Future Would Be Like After rereading she came back to add a little background information. This is an important step Reread to IMPROVE . I’ve always found the solving of crimes by DNA evidence to be interesting. A forensic scientist is doctor who examines data.
