The document provides feedback on a student's music video project from two iterations. The initial feedback noted some positive technical aspects but identified issues with lip syncing and shot length. The student refilmed sections and added black and white flashbacks. The second feedback praised improved lip syncing and use of editing techniques but noted some blurry or out of focus shots. The student acknowledged some changes based on the feedback but disagreed that one meaningful longer shot was too long.

3. 1.) Good, clear structure
2.) Includes lots of narrative
3.) experimenting with time lapse and pull focus
4.) Easy to follow

4. 1.) Some shots too long
2.) the lip synching at beginning isn’t quite in time with music.
3.) The flashbacks could be in black and white as to represent memories

5. In Conclusion from feedback from teacher: I am going to re film some parts of my
music video like the start bit with the lip synching as it doesn’t look quite right. I
will also edit some bits of footage for example the flashbacks, so that they are in
black and white. I will also film some extra bits as some of the shots I have, are too
long.
• I have sorted out the issue at the start with the lip synching, by re filming
• The flashbacks are now in black and white
• I have cut down the time of some shots

6. Second Cut of Music Video Peer
Feedback 11,2,14:

7. 1.) Favourite images and connotations:
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Time lapse at the start which matches to beat and the photos are clear
Pull focus on Dripping tap
Reverse stones
Spinning on tyre-swing
Fades into his face
Fingers crossed behind back
Black and white flashbacks
Lip synching works well and is in time with music

9. 2.)What aspects of the video promote
the track:
• Lyrics match visuals
• Goes with genre
• When she’s standing behind the gates while he is singing and shows emotions
of feeling trapped and unloved the scenery of the churchyard backs this up

10. 3.) How does the video use musical
genre conventions:
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Edited in beat with music
The drama matches the style of music
Using a couple in the video who fit with the genre
Gothic -Churchyard
Use of flashbacks
The images fit with genre-no bright colours used which makes the video depressing

11. 4.) Creative use of technical skills:
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Nice flash back editing
Use of time lapse at the start-well timed and makes a nice opening –Good pace
Lip synching
Good use of editing to show time passing
Close ups, long shots
different locations used
Good camera control
Lots of different camera angles

12. Areas for improvement:
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When the stones reverse, it’s a little fast (out of time with music)
Few out of focus areas
Shot at 1:52 (slightly long)
Final shot blurry

13. My Comments:
• From this feedback I have received I have change a few things; I have slowed
down the shot with the stones reversing so the shot is in time with music,
and you can see the stones in the hand afterwards for longer.
• I haven’t had an opportunity to re film certain shots that are a bit blurry,
however I have sorted out the end lip synching part so that the lip synching
is in time with the lyrics, as before it was slightly out. Moreover, if I had
more time to film I would have re filmed certain shots.
• In the feedback I received someone said that the shot 1:52 was too long- I
disagree with this comment as to me that shot shows the emotion in the
boy’s face and is symbolic and meaningful as he has decided that he is to
leave the girl even though the ‘chancers were in our favour’ so for me this
shot makes more sense being long and a bit blurry.